Thursday, November 4, 2010

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The Amazon Forest has been a place that is home to Ecuadorians in that area. It is one of the Worlds greatest natural resources. At the moment those resources are being destroyed and depleted by oil companies.  A major lawsuit taking place with a U.S. based Oil Company called Chevron in Ecuador shows the struggles Ecuadorians are facing as of now on their land and how money plays a role on where and how things get done.  The upper hand presides with the cooperation like chevron because of their ability to outsource all of the requirements needed for research in protecting the reputation of the company .With limited finances, education, and means the people of Ecuador are not as fortunate, suffering on different levels with no finances to back their fight against a cooperate giant like Chevron. The situations have become increasingly difficult for those living around the area showing their limited amount of resources available to them and how the responsible parties are not aiding to their needs. Although their government is a representative democracy it does not seem to be able to resolve the issues placed by the United States based cooperation demonstrating just how powerful the U.S is over Ecuador. Having the ability to deplete the lands resources for monetary gains and not have their ideologies shown for the Ecuadorian people as they would like to imply on themselves.

4 comments:

  1. In my opinion you’re putting too much information in one paragraph. Some of the information like why the corporation have the most power would be better it had more details. As well as why the Ecuadorians are not being represented by their government. Also some of the sentences at the top don’t seem to be connected very well.

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  2. Hi Melissa - I think this is actually a great start - in your next paragraph, you can start to introduce the sources and specifics to support your argument, as Rafael mentions.

    One thing: corporation vs. cooperation - notice the difference!

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  3. You have a very strong argument here, what Chevron is doing is wrong and they aren't being held accountable b/c of their size, money, and power. I think you should examine what is/can be done baout it (like that website), and cite specific sources that show what is happening over time b/c of Chevron in Equador. Otherwise, great job and great writing!

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  4. Another tip for developing as power analysis - you say something really interesting about the government here - as you go forward and bring in your sources, think about who this government represents and the limits of its power - the current events around Correa's attempted removal may be rellevent here.

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